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Gareth Lau
Comparing Opposing Viewpoints on Global Warming
In the first article I read, the author tried to prove that global warming exists. He stated that before the Industrial Revolution, the amount of carbon dioxide in the air was approximately 280 PPM (particles per mile). After the Industrial Revolution, this number was raised to 375 PPM, nearly a 30% increase. He suggested that this is due to global warming.
The second article, Climate Change Chicanery, by Christopher Booker, suggested that global warming is just a fraud. The author said that in 1893 a Norwegian explorer tried traveling to the pole, but ended up at 82 degrees north. Recently, another explorer tried to go to the pole but turned back at 80.5 degrees north, proving that the ice cap has expanded more than 100 miles. He also stated that an Indian scientist suggesting that everybody should turn into a vegetarian, because the methane that we produce from eating meat products will affect the atmosphere. He also talked about NASA’s satellites recording temperatures dropping in some regions.
In my opinion, I think that global warming is a very serious thing. According to these articles, the climate is changing wildly. Because of this phenomenon, seasons will be distorted, such as flowers blooming in the winter, snow falling in the summer, and a -20 degrees Celsius day in the spring. Both of these articles are true, because global warming also includes unstable climates, so places will get hot and cold very quickly.
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Paragraph 1:
-Who is the author?
-The last sentence uses the wrong cause/effect correlation. This increase is not "due" to global warming, but instead has "led" to global warming.
Paragraph 2:
-The second and third sentences are unclear, as few people would understand what 82 or 80.5 degrees North means.
-Check the verb tense of "suggesting".
-"Turn into" should be revised to "become".
-The methane is not produced directly by us eating meat products, but is rather caused by RAISING animals--specifically cattle. This is actually really significant, so it might be helpful to add some statistics.
Paragraph 3:
-Great examples!
-Your concluding sentence is unsatisfactory. How can both of the articles be true? State clearly which article makes the more convincing case. Also, make sure that your last sentence reveals your overall thoughts about the issue instead of introducing new facts.
Please post a revised version. :)
Core C
Gareth Lau
Comparing Opposing Viewpoints on Global Warming (revised version)
In the first article, Global Warming is Real by *Unknown*, the author tried to prove that global warming exists. He stated that before the Industrial Revolution, the amount of carbon dioxide in the air was approximately 280 PPM (particles per mile). After the Industrial Revolution, this number was raised to 375 PPM, nearly a 30% increase. He suggested that this has led to global warming.
The second article, Climate Change Chicanery, by Christopher Booker, suggested that global warming is just a fraud. The author said that in 1893 a Norwegian explorer tried traveling to the pole, but ended up at 82 degrees north (latitude). Recently, another explorer tried to go to the pole but turned back at 80.5 degrees north (latitude), proving that the ice cap has expanded more than 100 miles. He also stated that an Indian scientist suggested that everybody should become a vegetarian, because the methane that we produce from eating meat products will affect the atmosphere. He also talked about NASA’s satellites recording temperatures dropping in some regions.
In my opinion, I think that global warming is a very serious thing. According to these articles, the climate is changing wildly. Because of this phenomenon, seasons will be distorted, such as flowers blooming in the winter, snow falling in the summer, and a -20 degrees Celsius day in the spring. Both of these articles are true, because global warming also includes unstable climates, so places will get hot and cold very quickly.
P.S. I don't know how to correct the concluding sentence or the cattle part. HELP!
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